Kalafina lyrics collection

My suggestion for translation of "red moon"


Stanza 3
(Jpn)Akai tsuki no namida shizukana ongaku
(Eng.) The tears of the red moon, quiet music

(Jpn)Ikite yukou hikari wo wakeau you ni
(Eng.) Let’s live as if we share light with each other


Stanza 4
(Jp)hajimeteno negai ga umareta you de
(Eng.) I felt like the first wish was born

Stanza 5
(Jpn)umareochita namida no umi
(Eng.) The sea of tears we were born in

(Jpn)ikite yuku tada soredake no karma ga yorokobi yori kurushimi wo yobu no wa doushite
(Eng.) Why does the karma of simply living bring suffering instead of happiness?

(Jpn)yumemiru no wa itsumo shizukana ongaku
Kimi to nemuru kanata e todoku you ni
(Eng.) I’m always dreaming of quiet music
to reach the distance where I sleep with you

stanza 8
(Jpn) kudakeochita natsu no naka ni
hibiki wataru nageki no uta
koi mo yume mo itsuka kiete
sore demo mada todokanu koe

(Eng.) In the smashed summer
The song of grief resounds
Love and dreams someday disappear
The voice still hasn’t reached

Stanza 9
(Jpn) kimi to tomo ni ikiru no darou
(Eng) I’ll be living with you

Stanza 10
(Jpn) afuredasu yo hageshiku shizukana ongaku
(Eng.) violent quiet music will overflow

(Jpn) akai tsuki wa yume wo miru
Saigo no sora
(Eng.) the red moon dreams in the last sky
 
Oolong, I really enjoy the contribution, but most of your suggestions get lost, since they're just part of the stanzas. your translation for stanza 8 was great though. :V:
 
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ZERO said:
Oolong, I really enjoy the contribution, but most of your suggestions get lost, since they're just part of the stanzas. your translation for stanza 8 was great though. :V:
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at least s/he was nice about it and didnt come barging in putting her own tranlations up like s/he's the shi-- bomb
 
My suggestion for "red moon" (ver.2)
My comments are in parentheses.



Stanza 1
When I raised my hands and touched you
(my translation)
When I reached out my hand and touched you

there was a single high note in my chest
(mine)
a single high note came into my heart


stanza 2
Falling in love and learning pain
(mine)
By falling in love and learning pain

people become people
(mine)
we become human


stanza 3
the tears of the red moon are quiet music
(mine)
The tears of the red moon, quiet music (←this is two noun clauses, not a full sentence)

to share the light
(mine)
as if to share light with each other (←a figurative expression)


stanza 4
Since your voice called me
as if the first wish was born
(mine)
Because your voice called out to me
I felt the first wish was born


Stanza 5
Why does the karma of simply living
bring suffering instead of happiness?
(mine)
To stay alive—Why does that simple karma
bring pain instead of happiness?


Stanza 7
and then the voice that hasn’t reached
(mine)
My voice still can’t reach

Stanza 8
can I live with you?
(mine)
I’ll be living with you (←this is not a question, but something like confidence or expectation )

Can you hear?
(mine)
Can’t you hear? (← "でしょう？" is closer to "...not you?" rather than "...you?")


Stanza 9
resound the song of love to me, like fire
(mine)
resound the song of love, like a flame


overflowing, like violent quiet music
the red moon dreams
of the last sky
(mine)
Violent quiet music will overflow
The red moon dreams
in the last sky
 
Thank you so much Oolong and Zero!
I needed that translation :TdT:


Oolonguuu! is it "Resound the song of love, like flames"
or "Resound the song of love, like a flame" ??
or maybe there was nothing to add ?


And george, what is that strange thingy at the beginning of the stanza 2 ? ._.
2nd stanza said:
koi ni ochite itami wo shiri
hito wa hito ni nareru no darou
kimi ga naita yoru no mukou
hibiki wataru toki no shinbaru (cymbals)
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Intermezzo

Stanza 1

today being
the stage
he wanted to see by himself
(mine)
I wanted to watch today’s show alone

Stanza 2

now
my heart feels a little light
(mine)
Now
My heart feels a little empty

in the comedic interlude
let’s eat some sweet candy
(mine)
In the intermission between comedies
Let’s eat some sweet candies

Stanza 3

a story to which I already know the end
I don’t like to fake happiness
so tears roll
(mine)
I already know the end of this story
I don’t dislike a play of happiness
It brings tears to my eyes

Stanza 4

when the curtains open for comedy...
(mine)
A comedy begins with
a sweet sound of waltz
 
edited "red moon" and "Intermezzo" according to Oolongs translations (most of them).

thx, Oolong! I haven't had the time to think the translations through more carefully.... :XD:
 
Oolonguuu! is it "Resound the song of love, like flames"
or "Resound the song of love, like a flame" ??
or maybe there was nothing to add ?
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In Japanese, there is basically no distinction between singular and plural nouns.
If I were to choose, it would be "a flame".
 
"I have a dream"
stanza 2
(mistype)
Hontou ga mienai kimi no hitomi
↓

Hontou wa mienai kimi no hitomi
 
I have a dream

Stanza 2
What color are your eyes
that don’t see the truth?
I want to find the sky you see
↓
The truth is, your eyes can’t be seen
What color are they?
I want to find the sky you are looking at

Stanza 3
I have a dream
very modest
even if I can’t tell you at all
↓
I have a dream
It’s too tiny to tell you, though

Stanza 5
Surely my heart is really nowhere
even so
there is something we are making
↓
Maybe our hearts are nowhere
Even so
there is something that makes us

the last stanza
Time goes, we miss each other and meet again
relecting upon the frozen day of winter
morning comes, rubbing my eyes
I walk through the crowd
for you, for me
the world keeps spinning dreams
↓
Time goes by, we'll miss each other and meet again
relishing the winter days when we were freezing
Morning comes, I rub my eyes and walk through the crowd
For you, and for me
the world keeps weaving dreams
 
Hikari no Senritsu

Stanza 1
Is the brilliance of this sky
Reaching your chest?
The tune you dreamed of is like its quietness
↓
Is the brilliance of this sky
reaching your heart?
Like a silence, the tune I dreamed of will…

(胸 "mune" doesn't only mean "chest", but also "heart")

Stanza 4
The truth is, no one could hear it
Such a sound it was
But it echoed cheerfully in everyone’s chest
↓
The truth is, no one could hear it
Such a sound it was
But it echoed cheerfully in everyone’s heart

Stanza 7
When I sang alone, it was just a bit lonely
↓
When I sang alone, I was just a bit lonely

Stanza 8
The real pain
Was when I touched your chest
The tune I dreamed of
Is like its quietness
↓
When the true pain touches your heart
Like a silence,
the tune you dreamed of will…

Stanza 9
The sound of the sky echoes, high over your sorrow
We’re living here and now for the day when we can laugh together
Not even kindness or dreams can keep me here
Within the vanishing light, I make music out of tomorrow
↓
The sound of the sky echoes, high over your sorrow
Until the day when we can laugh together about the fact we are alive here
We can’t keep neither kindness nor dreams here
In the vanishing light, make music out of tomorrow (←an imperative sentence)

The last stanza
Because you think you aren’t a match
For the eternal truth your hands will grasp before long
With a rather loud voice
You named the song ‘hope’ and cried
Certainly it’ll reach the hearts of dreamers
↓
Before long your hands will grasp the eternal truth
Because you think it won't come true,
With a loud voice,
You named the song "hope" and cried
Certainly it’ll reach the hearts of dreamers
 
Ashita no Keshiki

stanza 1
why are the sad sceneries always the ones
that remain the prettiest deep in our hearts?
the hesitant moonlight is still not sinking
and sealed us inside the night
↓
Why are the sad sceneries always the ones
that are most beautiful and remains deep in our hearts ?
The hesitant moonshadow is still not set
and sealed us inside the night

stanza 2
Goodbye
until now I can’t put to words
though I hurt you many times
since from now on its a path I’ll return to alone
I let my fingers go from the moon’s bright house
↓
Goodbye
Until now, I couldn't put it into words
and I hurt you many times
But I can go back on this path alone
Let my fingers go before the moon loses its light

stanza 3
-mistype
yoake ni obie teru tayori nai mirai wo
mabushisa to namida de mukaeyo wo
↓
yoake ni obie teru tayori nai mirai wo
mabushisa to namida de mukaeyou

In the dawn, fearing the helpless future
let’s welcome the radiance with tears
↓
With a radiance and tears, let's welcome the undependable future
that is in fear of the dawn


stanza4
We are born alone, but can’t live alone
why do we get bewildered and cry together?
do we want confort? do we want to hold each other?
We’re not living with only a beautiful heart
↓
Why are we born alone, not able to live alone?
and in tears, bewildered by our twoness ?
"I want to confort you" or "I want to keep holding you"
We can't live with just beautiful minds like these

stanza 5
While looking back many times
to the open door I can’t return through
the last sign leading to tomorrow
↓
While looking back many times
I open the door that I can't return through
The last sign leading to tomorrow

stanza 6
the wind blows from winter to spring
so the flowers will soon smell sweet
inside these repeating days, heart
be always in full bloom
↓
As the wind blows from winter to spring
and flowers smell sweet before long
Be in full bloom, my heart
Always in these repeating days

stanza 7
The dawn is closing in
I can’t see the moon anymore
let’s start from here
today and tomorrow
↓
The dawn is closing in
I already can’t see the moon
From here, let's start
today and tomorrow

the last stanza
goodbye
the shadows I see off will soon be white
until they disappear inside a gentle time
↓
Goobye
Until the shadow I see off
whitely fades into a sweet time...
 
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oolong said:
(胸 "mune" doesn't only mean "chest", but also "heart")
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I know, but I like "chest". specially, because I've seen "mune" and "kokoro" in the same song.
 
@ZERO

心(kokoro) is something like "mind" or "spirit" ,in which the feelings and emotions are thought to be.

In contrast, "chest" is just a part of a body, isn't it?


chest [countable]
1 the front part of your body between your neck and your stomach [↪ breast]: Her heart was pounding in her chest.
a hairy chest
chest pain/infection/injury He collapsed with severe chest pains.
➔ flat-chested
2 a large strong box that you use to store things in or to move your personal possessions from one place to another: a large wooden chest
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(Definition from the Longman Dictionary of Contemporary English Advanced Learner's Dictionary.)
 
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