Lyrics Corrections for All pages

[Kizuato*]

I decided that since there are SO MANY threads about changing stuff in the lyrics section that there should be ONE thread for ALL of them. :\

In NATSU NO RINGO:

Kakire no himawari ni kakurete
Isoide KISSU wo shita
Kimi no yawarakana houtteta wa
Kitto totemo amaidarou

I thought it was quite strange, since "houtteta" wasn't searchable on my Japanese online-dictionary. So after looking into the red moon LIVE booklet, I found the following correction:

Kakire no himawari ni kakurete
Isoide KISSU wo shita
Kimi no yawarakana hoppeta wa
Kitto totemo amaidarou

 

[Mierin]

Umm... So do we post here for lyrics correction?

I downloaded Kaori's Calling single recently, and when I checked the lyrics here, I saw there were some mistakes in the romaji version. The one I downloaded had booklet scans as well, so I was able to check.

From the 3rd stanza:

haruka na toki wo kakenuke te
bokutachi no yobigoe wa
itsuka ookina uta ni naru
ai wo tsumui de yukeru yo
ima wa mada konnani chiisana hikari ga kedo

Should be: hikari dakedo

From the 6th stanza:

furue te ta te wo toriatte
naku shitsu ku nai to omotte

Should be: Nakushitakunai

 

[missjasminnn]

deleted comment. =)

 

[ninetales]

I think I found a mistake in the English part of Melodie - Salva Nos version. 'I hear it in my tears' is really 'I hear it in my dream'...but I can't be sure.

 

[missjasminnn]

here's my take on natsu no ringo. there's A LOT of mistakes on the romaji, so i wrote it up from the kanji in the booklet. it's one of my favorite songs so i would like to give my translation as well

垣根の向日葵に隠れて
いそいでキスをした
君のやわらかなほっぺたは
きっととても甘いだろう
野兎追いかけて草の中
誰にも見えないね
素知らぬ顔した野原に
脱ぎ捨てた靴の矢印

何もない夏でした
ただ恋をしただけでした
踊る三日月真夏の夜は
夢見る恋を連れて来る
檸檬色した星を数えて
君の心にキスをする

笛の音が君をさらってく
風の中　やがて来る秋へ

若すぎる緑の林檎は
銀紙の味がする
切なさが実る枝から
君が盗ってくれました
眠らない魚の夢見る
終わらない夏でした
心も季節も林檎も
色付く事さえ忘れて
寒がりな風見の鶏が
もうすぐ秋だよと謡う

揺れる三日月真夏の夜に
忘れた恋を思い出す
夢のひとひら
星の鈴音
君の心にキスをする
その夏のあどけない林檎
いつまでも胸にある果実


kakine no himawari ni kakurete
isoide KISU wo shita
kimi no yawaraka na hoppeta wa
kitto totemo amai darou

nousagi oikakete kusa no naka
darenimo mienai ne
soshiranukao shita nohara ni
nugisuteta kutsu no yajirushi

nanimo nai natsu deshita
tada koi wo shita dake deshita

odoru mikazuki manatsu no yoru wa
yumemiru koi wo tsuretekuru
REMON iro shita hoshi wo kazoete
kimi no kokoro ni KISU wo suru

fue no ne ga kimi wo saratteku
kaze no naka yagate kuru aki he

wakasugiru midori no ringo wa
gingami no aji ga suru
setsunasa ga midoru eda kara
kimi ga totte kuremashita

nemuranai sakana no yumemiru
owaranai natsu deshita
kokoro mo kisetsu mo ringo mo
irozuku koto sae wasurete

samugari na kazami no tori ga
mou sugu aki da yo to utau

yureru mikazuki manatsu no yoru ni
wasureta koi wo omoidasu
yume no hitohira
hoshi no suzu oto
kimi no kokoro ni KISU wo suru

sono natsu no adokenai ringo
itsumademo mune ni aru kajitsu


hidden by the hedge of sunflowers
we swiftly kissed
it seems your cheeks
were surely very sweet

we chase a wild rabbit among the grass
with no one in sight
in a field that pretends not to recognize us
our shoes we kicked off marks our way

a summer where nothing happened
all we did was fall in love

the dancing crescent moon of the midsummer night
brings us the love we dream of
as i count the lemon colored stars
i place a kiss on your heart

the sound of the flute carries you away
in the wind heading towards the approaching autumn

the green apples that are too young
bear the taste of silver paper
you’ve taken it from a branch where pain ripens
and given it to me

we dream of a restless fish
it was an endless summer
my heart, the seasons, and the apples
forget to even change colors

the weathervane that is sensitive to the cold
sings “it will be fall very soon!”

on a midsummer night where the crescent moon sways
i remember our forgotten love
the petal of a dream
the chiming of the stars
i place a kiss on your heart

those summer’s innocent apples
will forever be the fruits within my heart


i always find it awkward to write romaji because japanese is written together. i tried to separate them as words. like soshiranukao is not soshiranu kao, since soshiranukao as a whole means pretend to not recognize. etc.

 

[Alphard Sokaina]

Thanks! Natsu no ringo is one of my fav songs too

 

[ninetales]

I caught a few mistakes in the Ring Your Song lyrics~

CPM version:

Now we’ve come so far from darkness
And will never be apart
So we leave for tomorrow
To start our lives again

Find me there, my tiny feathers
Oh my holy ancient days
You will calm all my sandness
And ring your song
Only for me

Find me there, my tiny feathers
Oh my holy ancient days
I will calm all your sadness
And ring my song
Only for you

Booklet version:

Now we've come so far from darkness
And will never be apart
So we leave for tomorrow
To start our lives again

Find me there, my tiny feathers
Of my holy ancient days
You will calm all my sadness
And ring your song
Only for me

Find me there, my tiny feathers
Of my holy ancient days
I will calm all your sadness
And sing my song
Only for you

 

[Lorde-Kowz]

I could've swore i told George about Ring your Song two years ago. Oh well, i'll fix that, and all the other mistakes/typos~

 

[ninetales]

I'm curious...where did the Kajiurago for Materialise come from? I've listened to both the original and live versions, and I hear nothing remotely similar to the transcription on the lyrics page

This is what I hear, after writing down the original and then correcting it with the live version (the pronunciation is much clearer in the live, but I left out the extra lines):

sorte miya
yamahii, yamahii, yamahii
yamiya...

kameda sorte miya iya, iya
lamente sorte mita miya, miya
yamahii, koniyii, yamahii
(yamete kamiye te, amare kamiye te)
koniyii, koniyii, yamahiya...
(amaye kamiye te, yamate kamiye te)

ameda sorte miya iya, iya
lamente sorte mida miya, miya, iya
yamahii, koniyii hi, yamahii
(yamete kamiye te, amare kamiye te)
koniyii, koniyii, yamahii...
(amaye kamiye te, yamate kamiye te)

cante miya diya miya
sorte miya diya casa
kamarite diya miya
sorte miya diya kasa
canta miya diya miya
sorte miya diya kasa
kamarite diya miya
kamari miya...

yamahii, yamahiya, yamahii
koniyii, koniyii, yamahii...
yamahii, yamahihi, yamahii
yamahii, koniyii, yamahii...

kamida sorte miya iya, iya
lamente sorte mita miya, miya
kamete sorte mita miya, miya
lamenta sorte mita miya, miya

yamahii, koniyii hi, yamahii
koniyii, koniyii, yamahii
yamahii...

I don't know if anyone would want to change what's already listed, but...

 

[Alphard Sokaina]

Here's my version. It has similarities whith Niney's one, but I think they sang same words in verses, bridges and choruses. Like, they didn't sing kameda, ameda and kamida in the same lines. I guess you understand what I meant
The full live version:

kante miya
yamahi yamahi yamahi
yamiya

karmina sorte miya iya iya
lamente sorte mita miya miya
yamahi oimente yamahi
(yamente kaminenete
amaye kaminenete)
oimi oimi yamahiya
(amaye kaminenete
yamate kaminenete)

karmina sorte miya iya iya
lamente sorte mita miya miya iya
yamahi oimente yamahi
(yamente kaminenete
amaye kaminenete)
oimi oimi yamahi
(amaye kaminenete
yamate kaminenete)

kante mi adita miya
sorte mi adia kasa
amari te dia miya
sorte mi adia kasa
kante mi adita miya
sorte mi adia kasa
amari te dia miya
(s)amari miya

karmina sorte miya iya iya
lamente sorte mita miya miya iya
yamahi oimente yamahi
(yamente kaminenete
amaye kaminenete)
oimi oimi yamahi
(amaye kaminenete
yamate kaminenete)

yamente kaminenete
amaye kaminenete
amaye kaminenete
yamate kaminenete

kante mi adita miya
sorte mi adia kasa
amari te dia miya
sorte mi adia kasa
kante mi adita miya
sorte mi adia kasa
amari te dia miya
(s)amari miya

yamahi yamahiya yamahi
oimi oimi yamahi
yamahi oimente yamahi
yamahi oimi yamahi

karmina sorte miya iya iya
lamente sorte mita miya iya
karmina sorte miya iya iya
lamente sorte mita miya iya

yamahi oimente yamahi
oimi oimi yamahi
yamahi

Also, I can see some grammatical patterns in the bridge

 

[missjasminnn]

here's a translation correction and the kanji for serenato
i did natsu no ringo a few posts up since a lot of early kalafina songs have an incorrect translation




春を待つ花のように
風の中震えていた
もう少し近くに来て
命に触れたい

神様がいない国の
空のない草原には
帰りたい帰れないと
嘆く鳥たちの調べ

愛しい人と寄り添って生きて行きたい
いつも祈っているのは
貴方のことばかり

涙を詩に変えて
甘く奏でるよ serenato
鈴の音
夏の在処探して
今宵最後の星が照らす道を行こう
二人で

太陽が隠れてから
たましいは凍えていた
信じない信じたいと
愛を彷徨った二人

愛しい貴方と寄り添って生きて行けたら
いつか寂しい大地に
光を呼び戻して

いのちの旅路を行く
奏でる響きは serenato
鈴の音
夏の影を重ねて
いつか遠い静かな空へ届くよ

涙を歌に変えて
夢路に奏でる serenato
鈴の音
夏の在処探して
いつか遠い最後の町へ
羽を休め
二人で
眠ろう


like a flower that waits for the spring
i was swaying in the wind
i come just a bit closer
i want to perceive life

in grasslands with no heaven nor god
“i want to go back home, but i cannot go back”
grieve the tune of the birds

i want to continue to live nestling close with my beloved
i am always wishing for nothing but you

my tears change into songs
as the sound of bells sweetly play a serenade
i search for summer’s whereabouts
let’s go on the road where the last stars will shine on tonight
together

ours souls were frozen after the sun hid itself
i cannot believe, but want to believe in us
who roamed around in love

if i continue to live nestling close to you, my darling
then someday, i will call back the light to this lonely land

i go on the journey of my life
the echo that plays is a serenade of the sound of bells
as we head up to summer’s shadow
someday we will arrive to the far, peaceful sky

my tears change into songs
as a serenade of the sound of bells
plays in my dreams
i search for summer’s whereabouts
and someday, we will head towards the last road
so rest your wings
and let’s sleep together

 

[missjasminnn]

sorry for the double post >.<

because there were many, many grammatical mistakes in the translation on the lyrics page & since red moon is one of my most favorite songs, here's a corrected version

手を伸ばして君に触れたとき
高い音符が胸の中にひとつ
暮れ行く空 二人で見つめた
どこまでも続く世界が
呼んでいた

恋に落ちて痛みを知り
人は人になれるのだろう
君が泣いた夜の向こう
響き渡る時のシンバル

この空に描く二人の運命(カルマ)が
愛の歌を奏でるときっと信じて
赤い月の涙 静かな音楽
生きて行こう
光を分け合うように

君の声が呼んでくれたから
はじめての願いが生まれたようで
その手を取り 見果てぬ空まで
六月の赤い月影
追いかけて

生まれ堕ちた涙の海
人は何度叫ぶのだろう
潰えた夢、影の中に
光あれと
響けアレルヤ

生きて行く、ただそれだけの運命(カルマ)が
喜びより苦しみを呼ぶのはどうして
夢見るのはいつも静かな音楽
君と眠る彼方へ届くように

君に触れたとき
初めてのうたが世界に生まれた

砕け落ちた夏の中に
響き渡る嘆きの歌
恋も夢もいつか消えて
それでもまだ届かぬ声

汚れた手で花を喰らい
君と共に生きるのだろう
滅びの夢 時の向こう
聞こえるでしょう
遠いアレルヤ

この空にたった一度だけでいい
愛の歌を響かせて 焔(ほむら)のように
溢れ出すよ 激しく静かな音楽
赤い月は夢を見る
最後の空


when i reached out my hand and touched you
there was a single high note in my heart
we gazed at the darkening sky
the world that continues everywhere
was calling out to us

by falling in love and coming to know pain
only then are we able to become human
beyond the night you cried
the cymbals of time resound

i surely believe in our karma that the sky paints
as it plays a song of love
the red moon’s tears are silent music
let’s continue living
in order to share the light

after your voice called out to me
it appears the first wish was born
i take your hand as i chase red moonlight of june
as far as endless sky

i wonder how often do people scream
in the sea of tears they were born in?
a collapsed dream, amongst the shadows
“let there be light!”
hallelujah, resound!

to continue living,
why does simple karma alone
invite anguish instead of happiness?
i always dream of quiet music
in order to reach to where i sleep with you

when i touched you
the first song was born in this world

in the broken and fallen summer
the song of grief resounds
someday love and dreams will disappear
even so, my voice will still not reach you

by receiving flowers with blood-stained hands,
is there a possibility to live on together with you?
a destroyed dream beyond time
do you hear it?
a distant hallelujah

resound the song of love like a flame in the sky,
just only once is fine
the quiet music is violently beginning to overflow
the last sky is where the red moon dreams


汚れた手 means dirty hands, but it is also a way of saying "blood stained hands" and since i think this is more appropriate for the gothic feel of this song, i used that meaning.

dunno if anyone pays attention to any of my revisions
but here you go~

 

[Elicia]

Re:

汚れた手 means dirty hands, but it is also a way of saying "blood stained hands" and since i think this is more appropriate for the gothic feel of this song, i used that meaning.

I agree that yogoreta does mean chinureta in that context, but I think that's going a bit too poetical..I think it's better for the listener to interpret the meaning

 

[missjasminnn]

i don't think it's too poetical..i mean, yuki uses 喰らう here which is an extremely vulgar word. i've never heard my parents use it, but i know of it because of some novels i've read it in. and by using 喰らう, it has a negative context. i think blood-stained hands fit with the sentence way better because of it.


but i guess people can interpret it any way they want. it's still yogoreta te

 

[ritardando]

I agree with missjasminnn on 'blood-stained hands' for yogoreta for being not too poetical. Most of Yuki's listeners even adore her more because of her poetical lyrics.. In the comment for Kugatsu, I remember someone tell that "futari no tame ni" should be translated as "for our sake", but missjasminnn translated it as "for the sake of us". I replied to him/her that "for the sake of us" is more poetic and gentler than "for our sake", plus kajiura's lyrics are already poetic, so poetic translation is better. And he/she agreed

Thanks for the corrections. I always feel this certain weird-ness when I see the translation for red moon, and your version is more understandable. Thanks again, missjasminnn~Fellow Kamui-fans~ LOL

 

[Elicia]

Re:

Oh I see..I had thought my interpretation of that line was way too grotesque, so I thought it was too poetic to translate into blood-stained. But now I see my interpretation wasn't that negative

And about kurai...

Spoiler

by using 喰らう, it has a negative context. i think blood-stained hands fit with the sentence way better because of it.

That's because in symbolism, a flower usually means stuff like 'feminine' or 'purity', so a dirtied/blood-stained flower usually means.....
The meaning becomes even stronger when yogoreta is interpreted as blood-stained.

 

[garnetjester]

I love your revisions missjasminnn! Thank you for all your hard work! Seventh Heaven is my favorite album, and I really love Kalafina in general so I appreciate immensely what you (and every other translator, of course) do.

 

[ritardando]

I really have to say that Ashita no Keshiki romaji in this site is really awful. Some words are totally wrong, and most of them are not cut in the right place...

 

[missjasminnn]

^ i'll get on it soon

時の向こう 幻の空 is one of my favorite fictionjunction songs i happened to look at the translation on the lyrics page and noticed some grammar mistakes. a huge mistake i see everywhere (not just this site) is 〜ずに...it's is the same as 〜ないで. for example:

思い出さないで
思い出さずに

both mean "without remembering". ~zu ni can also be used without the 'ni'.

in this song, there's a use of potential + ~zu ni.
for example:

思い出せずに

which means "without being able to remember"
i see this always being translated as "can't remember" which is fine, but it looses the "without" part which is important. funimation translated a favorite song of mine containing 'omoidasezu ni' as 'can't remember' and i literally face palmed lol

on to the lyrics

愛しさはいつも
哀しみへと続いてるの?
君に もう一人きりで
泣かないでと言い出せずに

色褪せてく世界の歌
僕等は終わりへ旅をする
その束の間に君と出会った
命 を削るように

時の向こうに確かにあった
遥かな故郷、君と行けるの
愛も見えない夜の向こうに
幻 の空

夢を見るたびに苦しむのに
それでもまだ笑うの
風に逆らって
あとどれだけ足掻けばいい

この惨劇の行方がただ
静かな夜であればいい
知っていたんだ、届かないこと
それでも僕等は闇を駆け抜け

時の向こうにゴールはあるの?
辿り着いたといつか言えるの?
生きて行くから どうか光 を
幻 の空

いつでも
君の側にいるから
世界の時を止めて
抱きしめたいのに
in the land of pain

時の向こうに僕等は還る
遥かな故郷、君と行けるの
愛を見つけて超えて行くのは
惨劇の空

夢を見る荒野


why is our love always leading towards sorrow?
i faced you without being able to tell you
“don’t cry by yourself anymore”

with the world’s song that fades away
we journey towards the end
in that brief moment, i met with you
wishing for life to erode away

i can go on with you
to my distant birthplace that
certainly existed beyond time
across the night where love can’t be seen
is the illusionary sky

despite that i suffer every time i dream
i still laugh anyway
to what extent would be good to struggle
against the wind?

would it be good for this tragedy’s whereabouts
to exist in the silent night?
we knew that we can’t reach it
but we still ran through the darkness

does my goal exists beyond time?
someday, can i say i finally have reached it after so long?
because i continue living, please give me the light
in the illusionary sky

because i am always by your side
i put an end to the time of the world
despite that i want to embrace you
in the land of pain

i can go on with you
to my distant birthplace that
we return to beyond time
what finds and passes through love is
the sky of tragedies

the wilderness that dreams

 

[george1234]

thanks for the corrections!